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   I am the buyer and seller of souls.  I’ve bought them all and I sold you yours.  For the world must run like the gears of a clock, and sometimes you tick or sometimes you tock, but everything given will be taken away and for every silence kept, a word must be said.  

   Naturally, you must assume there is cost.  For everything gained, a penny is lost; of course this life can be no different--when the check arrives, you must pay the difference.  But not all who ride on the sunday train pay the same price to get out of the rain: a king’s ransom might obtain far, far less than the pauper’s cheap pain.

   Your father paid the price of sweat, a back bent under the yoke of the world; accrued worldly financial debt but was recompensed with the jokes of a girl.  And he would say he walked away wealthy, with his empty bank account, for his daughter lives today quite healthy and loves him in equally large amounts.

   Yet now we turn our eyes in shame towards the beasts we call rich men, who sate your hunger with the flames while hoarding away the hens.  These foul things live lives of envy, both the targets and the sniper.  While all they have you may desire, they aim ever higher.  And those will pay the highest cost as they climb the ladder of success, for no lives lost or families tossed will come before their behest.  And when they’ve reached the highest heights, and look back toward the earth, they’ll find that it’s a long way down, and the ladder can’t support their girth.

   And I bought their souls just as quickly as I sold you yours, back when they were old and sickly and you were being born.  What price you paid, back on that day, you can scarcely recall, but the price is yours and yours to pay, and will be paid in full.  Pay with life or pay with love or pay with earthly riches, pay with all your dreams and goals and all your unfulfilled wishes.  Broken hearts and crafted arts pay just as well as gold; paper flowers carry power if the youthful eye beholds.

    All the words you’ve ever said, and most of those you didn’t; all the times you ever read, and were inspired for a minute.  These all add up to a tidy sum, although you’d never know it.  You forget about the fortune you carry in increments of moments.

   But life is not a grocery store, where you keep what you have bought--it’s more like a free market, where you buy and sell in stocks.  And what you choose to pay your tab with won’t soon be forgotten, what you’ve put out in the waters affects what you have brought in; fishing with chum will net you sharks, and pearls may get you mermaids.  Pay your tab with love and I will sell you long and warm days.    Pay for love with hate and death, and reap your bales of misery, like so many fools who came before, throughout the course of history.  

   But one way or the other, you will pay a hefty fee, and one way or the other, you will pay it all to me, for I am the buyer and seller of souls.  I’ve bought them all, and someday I’ll buy yours.
AKA: My (Unofficial) Editors' Worst Nightmare

I dunno where the fuck this came from, but I just wrote it and thought y'all might like to see it. Clearly, it has no real structure or direction and I don't really know how to categorize it, but I'm kinda happy with it. It didn't really start out supposed to be all rhymy, but it ended up that way, so I guess poetry? >_> obviously very super rough draft, as in I just wrote it thirty seconds ago.

And obviously, waaaay outside my comfort zone.


Edit: Okay, was way rougher than I even realized. Just changed a few words around real quick lol

MORE EDITS: So holy shit, I got a DD on this months ago and never even noticed it because I don't visit this site nearly enough. I have a much greater appreciation for the piece than when I first wrote it, and did some more edits real quick to help with the flow in places. Also, I think all of the positive feedback (compounded with my wife) has convinced me that I need to find somewhere to perform this as spoken word.
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Given 2013-03-31
The Soul Broker by ~distortified ( Suggested by TheSkaBoss and Featured by BeccaJS )
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TonithePirate Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2014
Usually poetry holds no allure to me, but this poem is something special.  I think of it from time to time and have to come and read it again.  Maybe I'll take the time to memorize it...
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Vagabond24-7 Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2013
I love how this speaks with so much character!
And perhaps the word you're looking for is 'prosetry'.
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distortified Featured By Owner May 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
PROSETRY! Perfect! I'm so using that!

And thank you very much! I'm sorry for the late reply. ^_^;;
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Spectral-Amnesiac Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Very well done. Quite rough, I'm not going to lie, but I like it. I'm eager to see if you get around to finishing it!
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distortified Featured By Owner May 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! I haven't been on dA in a while, but when I saw all the love this got, it's definitely moved up my list in terms of priorities. I'll be editing it soon, and re-uploading for sure.
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Spectral-Amnesiac Featured By Owner May 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Cool. I look forward to it.
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KeelB Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013
This is fucking amazing! Can't think of what else to honestly say. What really got me however, was the line "You forget about the fortune you're carrying in increments of moments." Wow!
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distortified Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Okay, its months late now, but that was such a great comment that I have to reply. I wrote this expecting it to be a whole bunch of nothing, so it means a whole lot that you enjoyed it so much. "Fucking amazing" is all that I ever aspire to, and I'm glad that you enjoyed it so much. This one piece of feedback makes me smile like a big goofy moron.

Thank you so much for reading, and even more for commenting. I cannot express my gratitude enough
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KeelB Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2013
No problem.  Keep up the great work!
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Empress-Red Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Very interesting idea!
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distortified Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! (Way late on my part, but still!)
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Nerdy-Birdy1279 Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Amazing
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distortified Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Sorry for the late reply, but thank you very much! :D!
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unholyghost842 Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013  Hobbyist
This,....this is beautiful!! Oh my god!, that was one of the most inspiring pieces I've ever had the pleasure to read! This specks volumes to me, I love it! 'A super rough draft'?! No way, this is beautiful! My god that's it now I'm reading more of your work!
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distortified Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It's taken me a while to get around to replying to the comments since I didn't realize I got a DD until months later (I'm kinda absent except for the month of July usually), but thank you so very much! Getting a DD on it is one thing, but knowing that I've inspired or affected people is a compliment beyond anything that I even know how to respond to. Thank you very much for reading, and for commenting.

(And sorry if the rest of the work didn't stand up to your expectations. Like I said in the comments, poetry isn't usually my thing, haha. )
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Exlaa Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is really cool... i like it.
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distortified Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! I'm glad you enjoyed!
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Exlaa Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, I wrote that comment soo long ago! XD
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distortified Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I know! XD I didn't realize I'd gotten a DD until at least a month later (I'm mostly only on dA through the month of July any more, and only then for Flash Fic Month), and I've been too overwhelmed to go through my comments since then. Still, I deeply appreciated every comment that was left on it, so I wanted to make sure I acknowledged you at the very least.
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Exlaa Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Ha ha! Oh it's fine!
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Alediane Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013
This is truly amazing!
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distortified Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
And I am truly grateful that you took the time to read it and comment! :D Sorry for the late reply, haven't been on the site much since I wrote this.
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Amer4 Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013
Wow!
Congrats on the well deserved DD!

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distortified Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! I appreciate your feedback!
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EnderPezBuilds Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
woah...
o.o
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Greenwood-Wolf Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful...
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distortified Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :D!
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Ashe-Wakefield Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013
Wow! This is great! It was a brilliant read. Wonderful lyricism, I really want to read more.
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distortified Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! At some point, there may be a followup, but I can't guarantee anything. Like I said in the comments, it's not really my usual fare. (Also, sorry for the uber-late reply on my part!)
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FreakieGeekie Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is amazing. It may be unpolished but it's great as it is.
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distortified Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! I still may get around to giving it that extra coat of polish eventually, but in the meantime I'm glad that you liked it! (And I'm sorry for taking so long to reply, haha!)
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FreakieGeekie Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome :D
No problem. It's understandable.
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XMobiusXOneX Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013  Student General Artist
The Soul Market? Hmm, a hardcore Stock Market? Dividends are random luck change? I wonder if it is a buy all or put a stake of equity. I believe this might not be a lucrative market as stocks are.
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distortified Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'll be honest, I don't understand the stock market nearly well enough to even comment, though I'll agree that the current rate may not be quite as impressive as it may have been in a previous spiritual/financial climate. I hear this guy has retired out of the soul market and moved on to stocks and bonds since the writing of this piece.
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Fullm3tal12 Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
thats very deep i like it
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distortified Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! I'm glad you enjoyed! (And please forgive me for a way-late response. ^_^;;)
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TheLaughingDreamer Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
wow i got goosebumps. that was a great joy to read good job :)
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distortified Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Excellent to hear! Thank you so much for reading, I'm glad that it spoke to you! And I apologize for taking so long to reply!
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sakunokishimori Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013
This is good. Real good.
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distortified Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:bow: Thank you, thank you! I'm glad that you enjoyed!
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Euxiom Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013
Oh this is just awesome. :D
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distortified Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! :D It means a lot to know that the piece hit home for you!
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LostGryphin Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
wow - you had me hooked at the first line - congrats on the DD
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distortified Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'll be honest, if I didn't love the first line so much, myself... This piece probably wouldn't exist. Which makes me all the more grateful that it hooked you, too! Thank you so much for reading and commenting! (And I apologize for taking so long to reply)
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doublethefun Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013
I really like this piece. There are some great ideas and it's really well written. Nice work!
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distortified Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so very much! I'm glad that it spoke to you on some level, and hope that you can forgive me for my ridiculously delayed reply!
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f1r3r41n Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Fantastic. I love the lyricism present here and the story that it implicitly tells is terrifying yet oddly entertaining. I feel almost like I want to go get a drink with this broker, imagine the stories he could tell. I would be, somewhat, worried about who would foot the bill.

Seriously though, excellent work! You absolutely deserve this DD.
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distortified Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh yeah, no, I'd make sure to specify separate bills before I even sat down at that bar. Let him take care of his own check, for sure. I bet he's got the change for it.

But seriously, though, thank you so much for reading and commenting! I really appreciate it, and sincerely apologize that I haven't been around to reply sooner!
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ryanisnasty Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013
Congratulations on the well deserved DD, and Happy Easter! :heart:
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distortified Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! I hope that your Easter was spectacular, as well!

(And my apologies that it's so far after the fact that I'm finally replying!)
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